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A Rhyme Without Meaning

Author: Mr. Creep
ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96 /177 /112
Words: 77
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I love the idea here. dont you?

A Rhyme Without Meaning

A word without usage,
or a mind without thoughts,
Is like me without you,
and you make me distraught.

A heart without beat,
A body without a soul,
is like me without you,
an empty bottomless hole.

A vein without blood,
a life without tears,
is like me without you,
you erase all my fears.

And like a rhyme without meaning,
a soldier without strength,
is like me without you,
a love witout length...

Submitted on 2006-08-10 00:13:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  all of your poems are really good
| Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this one. I love all the metaphores and similies you used to describe it. It's truly amazing, keep it up.
| Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by chaos_bite | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this 1, its really good. i'm gunna add it 2 me fav's. Keep up the awsumo work, i'll c'ya @ star's party if my parents let me go.

{{ Lynoire }}
| Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by bloodydreamer27 | [ Reply to This ]
  Mr.Creep, your poems are amazing HONESTLY.. I love this one I can relate many can I'm sure you decribe it so well.. great job its going on my fav's

| Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  love this write,i can relate completely, its how i feel about my husband. its goin in my faves. jus 1 thing, i think u meant 'distraught' in 1st verse.
whirl x
| Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  This one is sweet. I like it a lot, just because the premise is so simple. The rhymes are above average, so that's good. The melencholy throughout make me wasnt to read it monotone, and few poems work that way, so it's very origional. It's wonderful. Check out some of my peices, if you would, I think you'd like them.

Wishing for more
| Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]

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