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    dots Submission Name: Writing on the walldots
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    Author: Fadeintoreality
    Elite Ratio:    1.94 - 33/115/65
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsWriting on the walldots
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    I can read the writing on the wall
    I can see the pain that is beneath
    and I keep on killing
    Spilling blood
    covering this wall in pain;
    blood of my victims
    so that whats beneath can breath
    for if I stop
    what will happen?
    Stories line these creveses
    each one a whisper
    and I silently scream
    as I go insane
    killing off everything living
    around me
    for my own sanity




    Submitted on 2006-08-10 00:13:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Disturbing yet very creative. You allowed the words to just flow out from your mind. Simple words are the best thing in poetry and used it effectively. After I read your poem, there were still things that kept haunting my mind, which is good. Your writing doesn't just express, it also keeps the reader seep into your piece.
    | Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by solitary_cross | [ Reply to This ]


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