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    dots Submission Name: Infernodots
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    Author: obsidiandreams
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 168/211/103
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I attempted to try a new sorta style dunno how well it turned out, you tell me :P


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    dotsInfernodots
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    Inferno blazing strong above
    The hill tops dry and weary
    They burn and sting each falling leaf
    With a dead mans fatal fury
    As it crumbs into ash its dew does
    Settle leak and melt away amongst
    The embers of this beasts burning past
    From each leaf comes another drop
    From the Earth and Heavens crying
    Shatter down each wall of flame
    Well dripping life unto the ash
    Sprouting anew what once was gone
    And begining its life again.




    Submitted on 2006-08-10 14:06:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this a lot....it shows how powerful change is, and I couldn't agree more on this, endings deserve respect because they symbolize the coming of a new beginning. I'm really depressed right now so I wanted to take more into the darker side and just find some way to say that at least the ending will be the end of this but next time could be worse...but I'm not sure, I don't want to givea lame, cynical comment just because I can't stand life. I liked this write in almost every aspect except the format seemed a little chaotic and made it a little harder to follow the flow, you had good visual effects tho, and your wording was pretty good; I definatly wasn't bored while reading it *hugs* you have to get online soon I miss you so much; everything sucks more when you're not here lol.
    peace && love,
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm...interesting. Sort of gives off an autumn to spring vibe with haunting sort of visuals. I liked it.

    | Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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