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    dots Submission Name: Estoriadots
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    Author: lynn marsters
    ASL Info:    20/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49/61/32
    Words: 256
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1016
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       umm, My brain does weird things, please, please, please, please comment, I love all comment good bad short long whatever please comment


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    dotsEstoriadots
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    Estoria in the mind of time held me in a pause
    I was in and of it
    the sound
    The spectacular beauty
    In the highest of senses
    And yet I was alone and afraid,
    Afraid of the beauty
    Afraid of the sound,
    Afraid of how I might look up against the eyes of the almighty
    Standing in the hands of god.

    And yet I allowed for a certain weakness and frustration to come over me,
    How is it that I should be judged by those so far below me,
    I who indeed tower greatly above all else, excepting Him,
    Who has allowed to attain such an extravagant height.
    Who has in fact lifted me and put me where I now reside in His awesome shadow,
    But no longer in the shadows of others,
    For now it is I who am the shadow over them

    In time my senses have grown to a miraculous new concept of existence,
    As my physical body wears away in death and in rot,
    I see still,
    I see with the eyes of god and I hear in his ears,
    He grants me all things and I want for nothing,
    He grants me what no others have
    And as I rot here my sickly flesh reveals the last remnants of my humanity,
    My eternal grin, peeking showily through the flesh of what was my face
    And the slow, steady rhythm of my ever beating heart




    Submitted on 2006-08-10 16:58:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm... Don't really know what estoria is... a name perhaps?
    somehow i liked this, the part of the eternal grin really got me. well... in death you become greater than you were in life, manny religions see it as another (higher) existance. the way you describe it is really good, makes you wonder wheather you have been there or not
    this is really good all in all, good choice of words, immagery, flow and storyline.
    ..........................................<----insert random praise here

    The little good wolf^
    | Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by Wolfie | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, it was interesting, but I have absolutely NO idea what it was about. I can't give you any criticism, constructive or otherwise. I'm really sorry. I just don't understand it. Me. All me. mae
    | Posted on 2007-08-19 00:00:00 | by mae | [ Reply to This ]


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