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    dots Submission Name: morning drivedots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsmorning drivedots
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    I let my head fall gently on the steering wheel the remnants of last night still sticky on my legs pressed against my skirt , cars go by and I know ill be here forever , the corner of my eyes finds the rearview and the details of the driver behind me come over me like a wave his eyes are brown I know without knowing his hands a hard ,my hips move slightly at the thought of them .like a dream I am his for now. the hood of my car is hot, burning my thighs a feminine pink, I can smell the sex baking ,his sweat burns my eyes I don't need his name just his forceful stare. I cant remember were my cloths went . I grasp a handful of dark hair and devour his neck he reeks of man no cologne just leather ,salt .I take him in like the ocean welcoming the storm . My head arches to the blinding sky don't move stay I want only for you to fill me a scream parts my dry lips ….BEEP BEEP. Reality and a stop sign jerk me from his fire I hit the gas with one last look in the mirror . His arms are in the air and I am sure whatever he is mouthing is profane .. Oh well he drives a bmw anyway not my style I wish I wasn't outta cigarettes though ..




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      I like Morning Drive. I felt like i was there in the car. the smell of old smoke cigarettes were lingering in the interior and it was hot. there was traffic everywhere. i could see all that. it made me feel like there was something/someone that i wanted so bad. and they were right there, but they would never see me in the way that i saw them. When you looked back at the guy and imagined being with him, i felt like the one thing i wanted was love. and although it was so close (just a car behind me) it seemed nearly impossible to reach it. to get the love that you craved so much. When i read it, i couldn't help but feel like there was more than just a frustration of not receiving the love you craved but also like everyday was a drag. just sitting in traffic in the heat. it felt like you craved to have a more spontaneous life. it just seemed like you longed for something more than what was right there in the car behind you.
    | Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by LossOfHope03 | [ Reply to This ]


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