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    dots Submission Name: For a memorydots
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    Author: atonement
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       Yeah this is about my biological father, Brian.


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    dotsFor a memorydots
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    Forgotten lullabies that I imagened you'd sing. Paper dolls with paper hearts, a candle's flickering light.

    Was this another illusion, or was it all reality?
    Were you even here at all? I hesitate, a quick sigh of utter release, I mouth the word no.

    In broken English I say good-bye, without even knowing who you were. But I know I can't say goodbye to you if you were never there to begin with.

    So I keep you as a picture in my mind, because all you are to me is a second-hand memory.




    Submitted on 2006-08-11 10:31:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like how this was written as like thoughts running through your mind and the second hand memories is a wonderful sentence to close this write. I almost felt like I was intruding on the thoughts of someone, without the written word. Really good piece!!!
    | Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by Molly Densmore | [ Reply to This ]


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