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    dots Submission Name: DANCERSdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Spring night
    Fire roars
    Breath strong with brew
    Heads turned up
    Heads bowed
    The scent
    Magnolia ?
    Orange blossom maybe?
    Breeze picks up the burning ash
    Carries it over our heads
    Cooling embers seem to come from no where
    Gently dying on closed eyelids

    Submitted on 2006-08-11 11:38:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very nice, it reminded me of sitting by a campfire or bon fire and letting the smells and fire take you away in your thoughts.
    | Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by Molly Densmore | [ Reply to This ]

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