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    dots Submission Name: SUMMER TIMEdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsSUMMER TIMEdots

    Night time solitude.
    Cool breeze after summer rain.
    Wasted voices drift in.
    Melancholy follows.
    These first hot days.
    The first June storms.
    Some where between orange blossom and jasmine is her fragrance .
    Ivory soap and Chinese teas.
    Her hair like the sky without its stars.
    Her eyes repeated in every lavender sunset.
    I conjure up each image.
    Walks down roads closed .
    Her hibiscus, always red.
    Long fingers through my hair .
    It always ends the same.
    My drink gone, my head spinning .
    That familiar feeling in my throat .
    Its so hard being alive when part of you is dead .
    So hard that your heart cant be filled .
    Its become ritual now.
    And I am as empty as this bottle .

    Submitted on 2006-08-11 11:45:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really find that very good. descriptive and just really good. you have a really nice writeing stile that I just love, I've fallen in love with. normaly I only fall inlove with the poems that the pro writes that have there own books in. but I quit write for a publishing comapany and made my way here. and i love your style more then anyof theres. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Ryou_Bakura | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very descriptive and a wonderful write. Great creativity went into this almost mystical piece. I loved it and thought that you have written this really beautifully. Your descriptions are very vivid while reading and beautiful.
    | Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by Molly Densmore | [ Reply to This ]

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