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    dots Submission Name: the Trinitydots
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    Author: geherald
    ASL Info:    26/male/PA
    Elite Ratio:    5.07 - 132/127/42
    Words: 378
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    the Trinity

    Jesus, Jack, and Mary Jane
    Dance in snow and sing in rain
    Do it once, then do it again
    Jesus, Jack, and Mary Jane

    Jesus Christ, the son-of-god,
    came to me, acting rather odd,
    thrown from Heaven for things he said,
    leaving his wife behind in bed.
    He told his dad to go to Hell,
    the day a killer rang Heavenís bell.
    Once upon Earth, he searched me out,
    for the answers to his doubt.

    Jesus, Jack, and Mary Jane
    The son-of-god lost his reign
    Now of earth he suffers in pain
    Jesus, Jack, and Mary Jane

    My old friend Jack met the Christ,
    if they met once, they met thrice.
    Once in the morning and once at night,
    again at noon, if my story is right.
    Jesus and Jack, they got on great,
    and always expected me to participate.
    But I had left Jack behind, long ago,
    And went in search of Edgar Allan Poe.

    Jesus, Jack, and Mary Jane
    It only takes half a brain
    For a man to just abstain
    Jesus, Jack, and Mary Jane

    Mary Jane met Jesus and Jack,
    at the bar, in the back.
    The two men were awaiting her,
    for she brought the herbal cure;
    answers for all the troubles of man,
    if only we toke it while we can.
    Then the two men and little lady,
    made a deal that was kinda shady.

    Jesus, Jack, and Mary Jane
    From the smoke they did gain
    A little wisdom, not in vain
    Jesus, Jack, and Mary Jane

    All three were now together,
    and at the party, they all wore leather:
    Jesus in red and Jack in blue,
    Mary wore a mask, so no one knew.
    The Trinity is for evermore,
    so now our world wonít be a bore.
    Smoke and booze, and the son-of-god,
    I only wish my life, wasnít so very odd.

    Jesus, Jack, and Mary Jane
    In the snow and in the rain
    Did it then, but never again
    Jesus, Jack, and Mary Jane




    Submitted on 2006-08-11 12:15:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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