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    dots Submission Name: Another Day at The Apocalypsedots
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    Author: Mr.Wednesday
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 5/12/5
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAnother Day at The Apocalypsedots
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    Another Day at the Apocalypse

    Four riders arrive, carnage in their wake;
    They’re moving forward with more lands to reap.
    All of eternity is theirs to take.

    The first horseman to rise from the fiery lake,
    Reveals the corridor to eternal sleep.
    Death is forever present, at every wake.

    Many fields have felt the touch of poisoned rake.
    Blight and bacteria have staked their claim,
    For Famine claims the hungry, his to take.

    War is feminine but make no mistake,
    Her sword has stayed sharp and engulfed in flame
    The actions of nations, kept her awake.

    Last is the horseman of natural make;
    Illness and suffering will guide his way.
    For Pestilence, remain the weak to take.

    As they arrive the ground begins to quake.
    Night will be dark and so will be the day.
    Smooth was the trip until unexpected wake,
    The horsepersons ride but find none to take.




    Submitted on 2006-08-11 13:05:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a very clever write where I believe you showed that there is hope in Life
    If one stays strong to themselves and dosent let the negativity of the world encircle their soul then one has nothing to fear in life
    You worded this very well
    I Look forward to reading more new writes from you
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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