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    dots Submission Name: you came, you saw, you broke medots
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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    26/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.27 - 63/298/259
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Lyrics/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 1369
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1173



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    dotsyou came, you saw, you broke medots
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    i saw you and loved you
    my walls crumbled down, i let you in
    it was a mistake, mt biggest mistake
    you were everything to me
    i find it hard to say you dont mean anything to me

    you cheated and lied to me
    i want you to leave, go away
    i dont want you or need you
    this is goodbye one last time
    you came, you saw, you broke me

    how long has this been happening
    why couldnt i trust you
    im going out of my mind because i love you
    i want to give you another chance but...
    it would just happen again

    you cheated and lied to me
    i want you to leave, go away
    i dont want you or need you
    this is goodbye one last time
    you came, you saw, you broke me

    how many have you broken, count me as one
    get out of my face i dont want to know you
    get out of my mind i want to stop thinking about you
    get out of my life you have hurt me too much

    you came, my heart faltered
    you saw, i fell for you
    you broke me, i wont ever be the same
    you came, you saw, you broke me.....




    Submitted on 2006-08-11 13:56:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Tottally can relate...very good...You should look at my poem "All in your hands" keep up the good write.
    | Posted on 2008-08-11 00:00:00 | by Bloodlust86 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this alot. tell me when you make these lyrics into music because i would buy the single for sure. my favorite line was:
    "i find it hard to say you dont mean anything to me"
    i've been in this situation a time or two and i know how painful it can be. powerful. very good work. keep writing...
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      That's so sad.
    It's almost as if I could feel your heart being ripped out and shoved down your throat while I read it. (Metaphorically, of course.)

    I really love the line "you came, you saw, you broke me." That's very clever.

    At least horrible things inspire great lyrics and poetry and stuff

    Very nicely done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-08-12 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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