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    dots Submission Name: Same Foreverdots

    Author: darkeveris
    ASL Info:    19/F/Someplace silent
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 34/62/38
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSame Foreverdots

    Sweet and lungeful emotions
    Quietly competing away
    Is all the world devotions
    Just another game

    There is no point to fighting
    About things one does not know
    And there is no use hiding
    The feelings that we sew

    Just another day of lies
    About importance and trust
    And endless fake ties
    To the ones who help us

    Another world of disrespect
    Longing, love, hate and fear
    Over and over like an insect
    Death comes and goes forever feared

    Submitted on 2006-08-11 17:45:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      without a description to read i can only translate your words by my own opinions. It seems to be about not knowing whats the point of living life if its just a game that cant be won. and we lose when we die.

    THis is a creative topic to write about-but i mean i can only hope that noone stays the "same forever"

    NIce read- it was somethin to think about

    | Posted on 2006-08-12 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it alot... I don't know what it all pertains too.. tho so ur gonna have to tell me.. but the creativity in this write was really good.. i miss talkin to ya on AIM but i moved in with my aunt and she doesn't ave aim so yeah.. if u were ever wondering. lol.. anyways good write again, im a go comment on other writes.. l8r

    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]

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