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I'll Survive but I Won't Like It


Author: Lynda
ASL Info:    26/F
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Just feeling anxious!


I'll Survive but I Won't Like It



I'll pack up my most precious belongings,
I'll move hundred of miles away from everything.
My everything,
My most beloved family and friends, my hometown, my life.
My biggest fear is that I can't come home again.
I know I can travel back, back for visits, for vacations, and eventually for ever.
But when I come back will everyone else have moved on?
Will my friends be married? Will I miss weddings, babies' first steps, that random night out on the town?
All I can do is pray that I can slide back into the lives of those I love.
Although they'll have to remember me through phone lines for a while, we can all look forward to that day that I come home.
I'll be a stronger person for taking this chance, more knowledgeable, more worldly.
I know I'll survive this time away, but even though I haven't left yet, I already miss home.




Submitted on 2006-08-11 20:38:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The last line to this is really very good and sums up your poem nicely. I feel you wrote this as your mind was full of feelings and words you wanted to get out. You expressed your despair and uncertainity very well, in each word and each line. It is always scary to have change in your life, especially if you are going to be away from everything and everyone you love. That has to be really hard and a hard desicion to make. I could feel the emotion in this and when the reader feels what you are trying to convey, then you've done well in your writings. God Bless you!...Molly
| Posted on 2006-08-13 00:00:00 | by Molly Densmore | [ Reply to This ]


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