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Self Portrait


Author: manicsmuse
ASL Info:    28
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Self Portrait


All the blue collides
onto the canvas of my self portrait.
Staining watercolors
drip down the palate
and streak my hands.

I am soaked in the
imperfection of this wheel.
So many tones,
light and dark.
The gray becomes the black
and the white smears the page.

The age of my green
turns brown and grounds me.
I feel the red ash
wash over me in disappoinment.

The final piece is
nothing more than an array
of swirls and circles,
twisted around
black lines
that seem to portray
simple
unhappiness.




Submitted on 2006-08-11 22:37:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Good work.You have shown analogy between the shades of colors and phases of your life.The choice is great and feelings are getting reflected very well.The write appears to be coming from a very matured mind who has really seen life.I liked your poem very much.Sad life has also lot to teach us and makes us more matured and a better person.Moreover everybody in this world has to bear the amount of pain whatever is in your share.This is part of growing up.I hope and wish for your happiness and good luck.
| Posted on 2006-08-12 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow... this is a good peice of writing... i like how you used paint as your theme to show what your feel...... it's very well written... my favriote line tho... has to be.... " the age of my green turns brown a grounds me"... that was an awsome use of words.... keep it up...


| Posted on 2006-08-12 00:00:00 | by ULA | [ Reply to This ]
  I enjoyed the colorful display of emotional distress as you so poetically penned. I do not agree with your conclusion that it was simple unhappiness, since your rainbow of sorrows seemed rather extensive.

All in all a very good write.
| Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]


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