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    dots Submission Name: Tomorrow without Youdots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    18/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.66 - 314/347/92
    Words: 420
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTomorrow without Youdots
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    You just tell me to not,
    ever call you back,
    and you forget that,
    in my life you are the light,
    that I can't turn off,
    fearing being alone,
    without you I am just blind,
    in a room thats dark.

    Just a puppet,
    without someone there to guide,
    I am just a dark cloud,
    which is lost in the skies,
    Me without you am a fire,
    that's just drowning,
    in the waters,
    and I'm afraid,
    you heard me,
    I am afraid.

    Today, but tomorrow without you,
    in my loneliness,
    without you I just feel like nothing,
    I can't go on,
    Today, but tomorrow without you,
    in my loneliness,
    today I say goodbye,
    even if I die,
    Today, but tomorrow without you,
    in my loneliness,
    without you I just feel like nothing,
    I can't go on,
    Today, but tomorrow without you,
    in my loneliness,
    today I say goodbye,
    even if I die.

    To me it doesn't matter what says your mother,
    and neither does whatever speaks your father,
    The only thing that mattered in my soul,
    was being faithful and give you my love,
    and how I would like to tell it to the winds,
    to tell you are the only thing in my dreams,
    but that never have mattered before,
    you left and didn't even bother to say so long.

    Come, you have to return,
    I understand well,
    They told you that I don't deserve,
    someone like you its ok,
    I understand that I failed,
    here is my heart just crush it,
    but just know I gave you my best,
    I forgot about the rest,
    For all your life my baby boo,
    don't let them control what you do,
    by the things that your friends,
    and your mother say,
    you know just fine,
    how you make me feel,
    how I love you more than my life,
    until the end of all time.

    Today, but tomorrow without you,
    in my loneliness,
    without you I just feel like nothing,
    I can't go on,
    Today, but tomorrow without you,
    in my loneliness,
    today I say goodbye,
    even if I die,
    Today, but tomorrow without you,
    in my loneliness,
    without you I just feel like nothing,
    I can't go on,
    Today, but tomorrow without you,
    in my loneliness,
    today I say goodbye,
    even if I die.

    "Just wanted to tell you,
    that you make my heart skip a beat when you walk by,
    and even if it kills me I am sorry,
    but I must say goodbye."




    Submitted on 2006-08-11 23:08:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a good heartbreak write. It reads like lyrics to me which I wonder if its intended to be a song or not? If so, you should classify as lyrics. The only part that confused me a bit was the end. I got the impression that this love was severely missed and wanted but then when I got to the end it was you who said goodbye? I found myself a little lost at that point. Why would you be the one to say goodbye if you love her so? Overall a very good and heartfelt write, it reads from the heart and expresses feelings well. I wonder if that last part should be omitted or if there is more to the story here that isnt said. If so, you should include why it is that you are leaving so the reader can fully understand and appreciate the full impact. A good write.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      You put a lot of power into this one. Can you please pick your heart up off the ground? I don't wanna watch it get trampled on!

    I think that in this you are basically stating that you want her.....you want her more then anything for she is the one that is meant for you. Yet, in the back of your mind you know that love isn't shared and you are alone with these emotions. Maybe from something that you did wrong....or maybe just from the fact that the connection isn't completely there.

    It is hard to say goodbye to somebody. Although it can be very healing to do so. You allow the love to still exist with no hard feelings, and know that you love them enough to love them from a distance.

    This was great!

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]



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