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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 514
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    So much emotion
    Wasted
    Poured out on paper
    Every sunset some how dulled
    Hate crept in
    Seeped through the edges
    Replaced the longing
    When did the sure thing become uncertain
    Everything separates
    All the goodnights
    All the looks and gestures
    We became you and I .




    Submitted on 2006-08-11 23:44:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Everything separates
    All the goodnights
    All the looks and gestures
    We became you and I ."
    totally my favorite part of the poem.
    this poem is so powerful, you didn't have to use a lot of words to say a big thing. I really enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2006-08-12 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]
      this was short but very good so many true powerful statements regarding either friendship or a relationship

    kind of like the old hat after awile it just gets taken for granted

    very nice great read

    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-08-12 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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