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    dots Submission Name: KNOWINGdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsKNOWINGdots
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    I waited once in the dark ,just beyond the streetlight.
    Instinct, I knew youd be there.
    I watched the light come on briefly in receiving.
    Then darkness, and I new I was ruined.
    My hands reached out for the metal.
    It seemed they did it on there own .
    The scent of burning leaves still evident in the ashtray .
    The blade buries itself deep in my thigh .
    I feel nothing though .
    A million days go bye
    Your head lights blind me.
    Your voice seems barreled alone at first then joined by many.
    My head falls down and I can see the red seeping into your shirt .
    I love that color navy blue.
    I got it for you last Christmas.




    Submitted on 2006-08-11 23:46:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that was intersting, sounds like reation ship/ cutting problems, sounds like you ran into an old lover on the street you really didn't want to see. I'm probaly wrong on this but hey I tired
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Ryou_Bakura | [ Reply to This ]


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