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    dots Submission Name: le coeur cassédots
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    Author: Rhaine
    ASL Info:    25/Yes/An Alley
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 660/744/196
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsle coeur cassédots
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    i want to her you scream
    be the cause of the acid tears
    that plague your face
    i want your body to tremble
    like you're being thrown around
    lose your breath
    choke when you
    try to gather air
    into your dry lungs
    i want you to weep so hard
    your eyes lacerate and feel
    like they're going to fall out
    i hope your soul
    that you feel like you're
    non-existant,
    nothing at all
    i want you to feel
    the pain that ran through my body
    in your head
    i want your heart to burst and rupture
    i want you to collapse
    i want you to hurt




    Submitted on 2006-08-12 13:30:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cold. I guess you could call this piece The broken heart, yes for the feeling we all have when we allow our heart to be broken. But I think Vengeance would be a much more suitable title. Have you ever heard of the seven deadly sins....
    | Posted on 2006-08-13 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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