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    dots Submission Name: It's Timedots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 259
    Class/Type: Lyrics/What you did
    Total Views: 799
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1736



    Description:
       Punk-rock sorta lyrics. Started them a month ago, just finished today.

    Some credit goes to Brenna for a few lines and all of her other suggestions.
    THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR HELPING!!


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    dotsIt's Timedots
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    verse 1:

    this is it, it's the last straw
    i give up, tell her she wins
    cause i can't keep on living like this
    i can't love someone,
    who loves someone else
    and i won't keep putting myself through hell
    for all those "one last times"
    for just "one last kiss"


    Chorus:

    it's time for me to forget
    that we ever happened
    cause it's getting hard to smile
    and pretend i'm laughing
    it's time to pack away
    all of the photographs and memories
    cause looking back makes things hurt more
    and everythings getting harder to ignore
    so late at night when you think of me
    remember you're the one who let go


    verse 2:
    i had fun, i'll give you that
    gotta say, too bad for you
    cause you could of had me forever
    but it's too late now
    there's no turning back
    and this is the road that we must follow
    cause it's been set for us
    time to go our ways


    verse 3:
    i told you, you had to choose
    and you did, cause you chose her
    i guess now it's time for me to leave
    time to say goodbye,
    no more one last times
    it's the end, and this time you were so wrong
    cause she wasn't the one
    i've been all along


    coda:
    this is it, i give up
    it's getting hard to smile
    and pretend i'm laughing
    it's time to pack up
    it's time for me to forget
    that love ever existed




    Submitted on 2006-08-12 16:04:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      "so late at night when you think of me
    remember you're the one who let go"

    I love that.
    The whole thing is wonderful, but thats my favorite part. It just kind of stuck out, you know?

    I agree with the last commentor. I'd love to hear it sang (or sung? lol I dont know) too.

    Very nicely done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-08-13 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      aww, this is sad but not at the same time. It's good too. The writing was great and I'd love to hear it sang. Great write, and I hope things go well for you. Great piece, keep writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2006-08-12 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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