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    dots Submission Name: Violetdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This was originally part of a longer series, but I really don't like the rest of the poems, so I think that it'll be a solo piece now.

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    Like a violet surrounded in mist,
    I'm a haze that doesn't know what to be.
    So bright, so new,
    yet, I look at the world through borrowed eyes
    that in everything can only see you

    Submitted on 2004-01-26 08:55:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the thought of seeing the world through borrowed eyes, yet the thought of a person being the sole focus of thought is hauntingly creepy. I guess it touched too closely to my own personal experience in fighting for independence within a very controlling and obsessive relationship...such focus disturbs me.

    Good piece though...
    | Posted on 2004-06-30 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      great poem, i like this on its own. it stand out better
    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]
      Odd is good. Normal people are boring! It stands alone just fine, as do all of your little pieces. This is a bit longer than some, but it works. Good job. <><
    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      The poems in the series were based on colors. This will sound weird, but have you ever seen a violet covered in the haze of dew in the early morning? An hour later the mist leaves, and it's bright and beautiful. I suppose that I was saying that I'm like the violet in the haze, but I want to be the violet after the haze has lifted. I tend to notice oddball things that confuse other people; I guess I've done it again .
    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]

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