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    dots Submission Name: Lebendots
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    Author: eMo_AnGeL
    ASL Info:    17-f-chicago
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 43/58/17
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 831
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 738



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       yea so i was like really depressed that day.....oh well....AND LEBEN MEANS LIFE IN GERMAN!!!! DON"T ASK! yea.....


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    dotsLebendots
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    I'm slowly losing my sanity
    These woes of a lost soul
    The unexplainable emotions I feel
    The sinking in of depression
    The non-stopping questions of reality
    Witnessing ignorance from others
    My inner demons protruding from me
    This craving for any feelings
    A longing for human contact


    Being shrouded in everlasting darkness
    Searching for some righteous path
    Alone in my thoughts
    Tempted to runaway from it all
    Attempting to understand the obscure
    Trying to repress the hostility
    Wishing to be saved from this hell
    To be set free from my confinement
    To be able to live again
    To be myself




    Submitted on 2006-08-12 23:56:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      holy [censored]! this is my 4th comment for this, but i just looked over it agin, and it scares me, cuz its things that were just on my mind.....very badass poem! :)
    | Posted on 2008-01-31 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]
      lol...i just noticed that pic "too mych coffe" made me laugh! lol
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]
      im commenting this again to get more generousity points....
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]
      this ones good
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]
      it was really good. you always seem to amaze me beanie. the only thing that i didn't like was the last line when you said "in short". it made the poem seem as if it was you talking more than a poem. other than that great work!
    | Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by Midnight_Rose | [ Reply to This ]
      it was really good. you always seem to amaze me beanie. the only thing that i didn't like was the last line when you said "in short". it made the poem seem as if it was you talking more than a poem. other than that great work!
    | Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by Midnight_Rose | [ Reply to This ]
      it was really good. you always seem to amaze me beanie. the only thing that i didn't like was the last line when you said "in short". it made the poem seem as if it was you talking more than a poem. other than that great work!
    | Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by Midnight_Rose | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i really liked the emotion projected in this write. hah i was about to ask what leben was, but you made that clear. well good work. keep writing...
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-08-13 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good indeed.
    A well written poem.
    Powerful emotion, and a strong use of vocabulary to back it up.
    Oh, did you know that "liebe"
    Means love in German.
    And I'm also pretty sure that leben means "loved"
    Wait, never mind.
    "Leiben" means love, sorry.
    Write on.


    Valle Siddious
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Valle_Siddious | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good indeed.
    A well written poem.
    Powerful emotion, and a strong use of vocabulary to back it up.
    Oh, did you know that "liebe"
    Means love in German.
    And I'm also pretty sure that leben means "loved"
    Wait, never mind.
    "Leiben" means love, sorry.
    Write on.


    Valle Siddious
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Valle_Siddious | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good indeed.
    A well written poem.
    Powerful emotion, and a strong use of vocabulary to back it up.
    Oh, did you know that "liebe"
    Means love in German.
    And I'm also pretty sure that leben means "loved"
    Wait, never mind.
    "Leiben" means love, sorry.
    Write on.


    Valle Siddious
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Valle_Siddious | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good indeed.
    A well written poem.
    Powerful emotion, and a strong use of vocabulary to back it up.
    Oh, did you know that "liebe"
    Means love in German.
    And I'm also pretty sure that leben means "loved"
    Wait, never mind.
    "Leiben" means love, sorry.
    Write on.


    Valle Siddious
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Valle_Siddious | [ Reply to This ]


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