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good-bye


Author: bbcherry
Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 79 /34 /16
Words: 165
Class/Type: Story /Longing
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Another peice for my story.


good-bye



Teardrops fell from my face, as I held her hand. Sorrow overtook my painfully broken heart, as I kept wondering, and trying to understand. Why did I have to let go. Why can't I have her here to hold and watch her grow. How will I ever get along, without someone who made me feel so strong? My body started trembling, tears still streaming down my cheeks, I began to realize the end was here. I felt smaller than ever, young and weak. I just couldn't say good-bye. Instead I stood silenty as she watched me cry. In a moment she left. How can I move on from this past. I've never felt so alone. Time goes by so fast.





Submitted on 2006-08-13 15:05:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A Good poem. Why didn't you put the lines in as stanzas? It would have looked better if you did.

The rhyme was good and teh flow of th ewords was ok. Excellent qualities as a good by letter.

Overall it was an average poem.

UsGlen
| Posted on 2006-08-13 00:00:00 | by usglen | [ Reply to This ]


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