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Dear little ones coming,


Author: bbcherry
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from a child that you are now, till you are too old to be anything anymore...


Dear little ones coming,



your inside
gaining all that you can gain
in time you will free yourself
and take space for another
your mind will be wonderous
trying to understand
these new surroundings
by questioning
all senses
that you come across
most will be waiting
for your reaction
others will try and deprive you
of your well being
everything you do will determine
your future
as well as what others do for you
again in time
you will feel
that you have achieved
all that you can
and just let your mind run free
till you no longer can
be brave
for all take this into their own life
you are not alone




Submitted on 2006-08-13 17:48:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2007-05-15 00:00:00 | by SAMEER | [ Reply to This ]
  to me this sounded like a pep talk for life like trying to prepare yourself for the things that are to come and the way people are it may have a different meaning but this realy sounds like a talk a good person would give to a child i like it in the sence that if it was directed at me i would listen rather than just ignore them for trying to make feel like im just a stupid child this is realy different i like it :)

Rak ^)
| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by dark figure | [ Reply to This ]


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