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    dots Submission Name: Absolutiondots

    Author: Lisa Milligan
    ASL Info:    48/F/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 38/47/21
    Words: 256
    Class/Type: Poetry/Them
    Total Views: 838
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       I realize this is heavily symbolic and may be hard to understand, but I'm curious how people interpret this piece before knowing who I'm writing about.

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    I let the pussy go today; he scratched me to get away
    I told him to take the tool with him
    Because it would prick me instead of helping me
    I took the arrows out of my back
    There are bits of stone left behind from the arrowheads
    But I donít feel them anymore
    I took my four small bottles of Holy Water
    And gave them to people who respect me
    Then I went to the ocean
    I took my heart shaped shell
    It was broken in two
    I stepped into the waves and let the waters cover my feet
    Slowly I opened my hand
    And let the pieces fall into the water
    I watched them for a long time as they tumbled to and fro in the waves
    This was the hardest to let go of
    I knelt in the water and pondered how the shell moved toward me
    And then away from me with the tide
    Some people believe all life came from the sea
    But I know this letting go is best for me
    And as I get up and turn my back on the ocean
    I walk slowly but with a confident stride
    Not looking back
    Never looking back
    Forgiveness has been given
    My footsteps in the sand will disappear over time
    Like I already have
    And thatís alright
    The boulder has been lifted off my chest
    And I look straight ahead, and walk through the sand
    Up the steps, along the fence
    And into my future

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      Very poignant and emotional poem. Deep on so many different levels.

    My fav lines are:

    'My footsteps in the sand will disappear over time
    Like I already have' -

    Just beautiful.

    The writing evokes images for me of the famous painting of the woman in the sea shell and for the life of me I cannot remember the name. I thought at first Venus De Milo put that' s not the right one. Pls share your secret with us - I'm intrigued.

    Very well written.
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very deep and full of a seris of emotions, mostly a feeling of being at peace. I am not sure as to whom you are speaking of. I thought maybe, satan, cupid, or your old self that was very self destructive, to have arrows in your back, that you no longer was. Whatever or whom, you left behind, you went through a cleansing process, a extrocisim of sorts, without the church. I notice you gave the holy water to ones you respect, not love. That means to me these people are not really a part of your cloest circle. You redeemed yourself. That is what I get from this and you felt scared as you did it because change is always scary. Please tell me what you meant by this write. I enjoyed it alot. As I said you are very creative.

    | Posted on 2006-09-10 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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