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    dots Submission Name: Aspiration #1dots

    Author: Syndl
    ASL Info:    28/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 56/55/19
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsAspiration #1dots

    Would that I could be as light and carefree as the wind.
    Always moving, slipping soundlessly around the trees.
    As fickle as a gentle breeze,
    And as demanding and terrifying as a hurricane.
    WIth power at my fingertips,
    Destruction at my whim.
    Or the simple choice to meander lazily,
    Through the fine tresses of a beautiful woman’s hair.
    To dance silently on a moonlit night,
    Through a forest of wisened oaks
    Or to dash recklessly atop the highest city scrapers.
    With the world as my playground,
    And all eternity to relieve my cares,
    Would that I could be the wind.

    Submitted on 2004-05-19 15:10:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      If I had written this I would have used line breaks but I wouldn't have changed any of the wording, it's lovely.
    | Posted on 2004-05-19 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]

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