I'm tired of screaming.
I'm tired of yelling.
I'm tired of holding back tears
As I listen to cell phone static.
I want to hear your voice
Gentle and kind.
But all I hear is your angry roar
As you beat me down
With your words of venom.
I don't know what's worse,
Your words or your fists?
They both equally hurt.
They both equally bruise.
The both turn me inside out,
As I wonder, I wish,
What did I ever do to deserve this?
| I agree with SweetX, the emotion in the poem is highly charged and the reader can't help but react in the same way. Your poem is still going through my head as I write this reply and I am moved, so I can only say well done, great poetry. Mel.||| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by litllost | [ Reply to This ] || This was very well written. It flowed through my mind swiftly, and the word choice was simple yet very effective. Reading this I felt pain, yearning, confusion, sorrow, and some anger. So many emotions in just one write, great job! This was written very well. If I could cry, this would probabaly make me. Shows are very awesome this is. I don't really have much else to say except, I'm sorry you had to have a boyfriend that was like that. I've been there and I know how much it sucks. Keep your head high though, you'll find the right one someday. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.|
Sweet Blood Vampire
|| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by SweetX_XBlood | [ Reply to This ] || Like Sweet, I can relate to this, but I can say that I'm happy your description reads "ex-boyfriend". That means you got out which is good. Some females stay, let it build up, things get worse... anyway, I digress.|
I think this was very liberating. Your opening lines are what you're sick and tired of doing, meaning you're not going to take it anymore. So kudos to you for realizing you were in a bad situation and getting out of it. The bad guys make you appreciate the good ones that much more, and when you find something real, it's that much sweeter. Great job. ....bb...
|| Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ] || Wow, talk about slapping me in the face with emotion and anger. It flowed so well and drew up to the ending so bitter. I felt bitterness, longing, hurt. Being scared.|
I wanna kick this punk's ass.
|| Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ] |