Wishing for you.. by Maskannai

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Author:	Maskannai
ASL Info:	25/Female/Utah
Elite Ratio:	4.91 - 171/158/67
Words:	133

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	135
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	703

Description:
A little something I brought out of my heart since I cannot bear to leave it in any longer..

Wishing for you.. dots

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"Good morning world," I said as the sunlight filtered through sheer curtains to gently caress my face. I greeted the day and wished for you, but there was no simple answer waiting by my slippers. I sighed and put them on anyway, knowing that I had to face yet another day without the warmth of you caresses, so much better than simple sunlight. I carry on through my own world, each day wishing for you more and more, and hiding it every second from the one I'm with. How can anyone live with such feelings as there beating against their ribcage? I guess they just do what I've done my whole life. Live each day as it passes and keep wishing, but never doing anything about it.

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  hmm...
this somewhat reminds me of what im going through right now. ...i was with this guy (for almost 2 years) and then i cheated on him with another guy ([censored]ty thing to do i know) then my boyfriend and i broke up but we got back together. ...and all of a sudden as of a few weeks ago i started missing the guy i cheated with. ...and i saw him over the weekend just randomly...and then he texted me and i've been talking to him a lot lately...and i really really like him a lot. and i really miss him...and i just wish things would happen the way i want them too...without me actually having to do the work. :-/ i know nothing will get done that way. and im still not entirely sure what im wanting to do?! ...im so confused...

anyways i loved the description you used...and i liked the part about how there was no simple answer by your slippers...i thought that was really kinda cute :-)

this was a good write. ...i like it a lot.
| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by vintagepepper | [ Reply to This ]
  i think your web of words is wonderful, it has everything in it, in the starting it looked like a simple piece but as i read it became deeper n deeper, the ending was wonderful, it was amazeing how you can see both sides of things.
maybe you are deeper than you look.
and anyone who has you is a luck guy.

keep on writting, you are good at this.

bye
nishant
| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by imagination | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey Tiffany,

Keeping such things within can be sometimes so harmful that the more it is buried within, the more confused you get. I guess it's good you kinda let these thoughts out. sometimes, all you can do is wish because you cannot really do anything else but don't take this wrong, wishing is not all that bad. Sometimes when you act on your feelings, things can get worse than they really are. Don't be sad, be glad. Don't long for things you know you might not want later. In the end, it's not what you want, it's what you need.

Anyhow, the piece was very profound although simplistic yet still had that touch of beauty. I'm not a really big fan of line after line but i guess it's a style, so i won't emphasise too much on that.

Just whatever you decide to do and whatever you may be thinking of, turn all your thoughts into something positive or else you're gonna drive yourself crazy over wishing things. Keep writing from your heart....It's coming out fantastic so far....

Take care....
~Irina
| Posted on 2006-08-19 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]

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