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My Sighs Whisper Your Name from My Heart

Author: vintagepepper
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
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this seems rather elementary to me in all honesty but it just came out. ...hmm...gets a little weird in some parts....seems as if i tried to cornily make it rhyme in some places but in all honesty i didnt MEAN to make it rhyme at all...but i know it does a little bit...that was COMPLETELY on accident. ...this is completely raw...excuse the capitalization and punctuation if they are a little funky because i wrote this on a word document and it does all that jazz for you..i was just too lazy to go back through and fix it.

thoughts, suggestions, whatever you feel necessary!!

thanks guys!

My Sighs Whisper Your Name from My Heart

What happened then?
When we first started off
A new love,
New friendship
New places to explore
One big secret to be kept.

Two hearts
In sync,
In the moment of what seemed to be filled with perfection.
What passion flowed between our fingertips
Transferred from your tongue to my lips.
From your hands, to my hips

I knew of nothing but you
And you, nothing but I.
We were.
We simply just…were.

Two beings nestled tightly
Held by each other’s warmth,
Held in a sin of lust, of passion,
Of intimacy.
…intimacy in a moment – nay
A single heart beat
Where that one spark caught
And ignited our flame

The fire in your eyes entranced me,
Held me there, tight to your gaze
In your arms
Nails in back
Chest heaving heavily against mine.

You are beautiful.
More beautiful than I can make you realize.
You made me feel.
But it was nothing short of a dream
Only playing itself out in the reality
Of my life.

I had lust-less ties to a ghost,
A ghost incapable of love,
He chained me,
Shackled me with my deflowered vine
Only sacredly held in one’s hand.

I’m a slave.
And will forever be a slave
To his cravings.
To his will.
To his heart.

But I’ve betrayed him,
And his kindliness.
Now I stare into his hollowed eyes
And only see you peering through the gray

Why didn’t I hold on.
Why couldn’t I be strong.
Where did I go wrong?
Why must I cower
At the feet of a lover
With cobwebs.

What did I let you go for.
To live in darkness with a ghost,
Lashing me for my deeds.
Killing me.
When I could have had love.

And now I have ruined you,
I have ruined him,
I have ruined me.
I’ve lost what was beautiful.

I’ve lost you…
I’ve lost us.

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  This is another remarkable write, Kristina! You have remarkable talent with prose, and write with passion and eloquence! Nice work!
| Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  This was heart felt I could tell. I hope things worked out for the good? Anyway I enjoyed this poem and everything you had to say.
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmmm. *thinks for a few moments gathering his thoughts*

Lets get the obvious out of the way first...
No apparent spelling or punctuation errors, and the flow is nice, whether you felt it rhymed too much or was forced or not.

"And now I have ruined you,
I have ruined him,
I have ruined me.
I’ve lost what was beautiful.

I’ve lost you…
I’ve lost us. "

My favorite lines. But I would present you with a question.. Did you really ruin him and yourself, or were you both already ruined? It takes a hell of alot to ruin a person emotionally, more times that not, we're already ruined, and such is our deep, dark secret..

I think we all can relate to this piece in some way, shape, form or fashion. We've all had a love we've scorned or turned aside, whether it be from fear, or otherwise.

First piece I have ever read from you, and I enjoyed it very much. I shall certainly be having a look at the others.

| Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by Vampirism | [ Reply to This ]
"I’ve lost you…
I’ve lost us. "

Realisation late makes the mind so sad and the sweet memories act likepeeper on the wounded mind.your style of free flow as it strikes you is marvelous. In the name rule and rhyme if we fail to express our mind, it is a futile attempt. I feel you are vociferous and time passes like the wind and heart enlightened.

Love failure is really a torture to heart!
pen on dear Pepper!

| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by ceegeeess | [ Reply to This ]

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