I realy liked this one. You commented on one of my poems so I figuered I would take a look at one of yours and I love it. My wife and I have been fightin through all kinds of terrible crap lately and I had to leave, so I can relate, I love the close to rhyming, but not quite.
"flowers are wilting glasses are spilling our house is heatless warmth is now useless" Oh I just looooooove that part. It made me think of my house and family and all the mess and unloved life in here. This brought a tear to my eye.