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    dots Submission Name: empty housedots

    Author: ariadne
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 99/85/26
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsempty housedots

    stare at your pillow
    feeling the sun go
    turn and look at the walls
    cant find you at all

    searching the hallway
    got too much to say
    collapse on the carpet
    feeling disheartened

    you left your blanket
    won't come back for it
    home desperations
    cruel revelations

    flowers are wilting
    glasses are spilling
    our house is heatless
    warmth is now useless

    heart won't just give up
    head calling your bluff
    you're back uninvited
    rain-soaked and righted

    Submitted on 2004-05-19 16:15:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I realy liked this one. You commented on one of my poems so I figuered I would take a look at one of yours and I love it. My wife and I have been fightin through all kinds of terrible crap lately and I had to leave, so I can relate, I love the close to rhyming, but not quite.

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    | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by Al | [ Reply to This ]
      "flowers are wilting
    glasses are spilling
    our house is heatless
    warmth is now useless"
    Oh I just looooooove that part. It made me think of my house and family and all the mess and unloved life in here. This brought a tear to my eye.
    | Posted on 2004-10-29 00:00:00 | by Cigarette Smoke | [ Reply to This ]

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