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Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253 /299 /172
Words: 13
Class/Type: Haiku /Misc
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The first haiku I ever wrote, and it's definitely going to be the last.


Lost



Something is missing
I have no idea what
so I can't find it




Submitted on 2006-08-14 20:45:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this. Very straight-forward and to the point. Hard to do with Haiku. Not one of my favourite things to write, but definitly has it's place. You've written yours well.

However, as opposed to coyote and Annabelle, I counted only six syllables in your second line. It really depends on how you break it up:

I - have - no - i - dea - what (six sylllables)
OR
I - have - no - i - de - a - what (seven syllables)

I can't seem to figure out how Annabelle got eight, though...

But alas, only minor nit-picking. Very well done, good read.

Cheers <3
megan
| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by disturbed420 | [ Reply to This ]
  Nothing is missing
All is present in your work
Voila, a haiku.

Actually, I count only seven syllables in your second line, so you made the grade.
| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by coyote | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not a very good judge at Haiku; so this'll be merely opinions. Haiku are extremely difficult to write, and I rather like this one. I think it expresses what it's meant to very well. It's very straightforward. The only thing I notice is that the second line is eight syllables instead of seven; but I don't want to be terribly technical. I like it a lot!
| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by Annabelle | [ Reply to This ]


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