Something is missing
I have no idea what
so I can't find it
| I like this. Very straight-forward and to the point. Hard to do with Haiku. Not one of my favourite things to write, but definitly has it's place. You've written yours well.|
However, as opposed to coyote and Annabelle, I counted only six syllables in your second line. It really depends on how you break it up:
I - have - no - i - dea - what (six sylllables)
I - have - no - i - de - a - what (seven syllables)
I can't seem to figure out how Annabelle got eight, though...
But alas, only minor nit-picking. Very well done, good read.
|| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by disturbed420 | [ Reply to This ] || Nothing is missing|
All is present in your work
Voila, a haiku.
Actually, I count only seven syllables in your second line, so you made the grade.
|| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by coyote | [ Reply to This ] || I'm not a very good judge at Haiku; so this'll be merely opinions. Haiku are extremely difficult to write, and I rather like this one. I think it expresses what it's meant to very well. It's very straightforward. The only thing I notice is that the second line is eight syllables instead of seven; but I don't want to be terribly technical. I like it a lot!||| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by Annabelle | [ Reply to This ] |