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    dots Submission Name: Innocent Insane!dots
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    Author: Abnormalty
    ASL Info:    19/male/Norway
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 9/12/7
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 769
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    Bytes: 883



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       It's not really finished, but I just wanted to submit something again


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    dotsInnocent Insane!dots
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    When the words came out, you said its all in vain
    And you shot the ones that caused you pain
    They all screamed, and said you were innocent insane
    But that didn't stop the bullet rain

    You were dead
    When they pulled your soul through the dark
    I can't explain
    Why I threw the first stone at you

    Now, you say, it's for the better
    When the clouds get darker
    But I, can't say I felt happy
    When I watched you bleed to death

    You came back, in the form of a beautiful angel
    So they couldn't stake your heart again
    But something wasn't right, and you couldn't hold the tears inside
    It rained for a century

    They hate you
    And the innocent light you shine
    I love you
    For the pain you make me feel




    Submitted on 2006-08-14 23:31:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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