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    dots Submission Name: one mic (verse 1)dots

    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 323
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 931
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       i wrote this a long time ago and at the time i thought it was the best thing that i had ever written. i feel differently now. tell me what u think. holla

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    dotsone mic (verse 1)dots

    All I need is one mic, one change to hold my own
    One chance to take my place on the soldierís throne
    Cuz once the boulderís thrown, it keeps rolling
    Youíre in a hurry to die, I keep strolling
    All I need is one girl to hold my affections
    Having her in my world is just like a blessing
    One hand to wipe the tears from my eyes
    The otherís to catch me as I fall from the skies
    One God to guide me as I near my demise
    One mind to plot and devise
    One sign to lead the dumb and the wise
    One pen thatíll never run out of ink
    One eye to stay open as the other one blinks
    One brain even though I donít know what to think
    I need solid ground cuz Iím starting to sink
    One true friend thatíll be there forever
    One friend for me to lean on during the stormy weather
    Someone whoíll never bend if times never get better
    All I need is one fam thatíll convince me that Iíll never be damned
    Because going to hell isnít one of my plans
    I need someone to truly know who I am
    And I really need on man, one fan to tell me that heís feeling my jams
    I need one type of blood to flow through my veins
    One heart to keep beating when nothing remains
    One book that never runs outta paper
    I need one nation to love all itís neighbors
    One peace to be felt over the globe
    A pacifistic aftermath after it all unfolds
    I need drug dealers to put down their guns
    And baby daddies need to pick up their sons
    My legs are moving as fast as they can but I donít know where to run
    Iíve been through the wire, donít know what Iíve become
    Itís a start, the war for out souls has now only begun

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    ||| Comments |||
      This sounded a lot like Nas....I believe that his was also called one mic wasn't it?

    It seems like you picked up this rhythm as well. Nas is huge....he is a lyricist that gets overlooked.

    This was very impacting though. I think that you did a great job picking up that same theme in this.

    I liked it!

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh Nas Jr!!! lol let me stop. I thought it was good. It wasn't the best thing you've ever wrote but it was up there. Now this part:

    One hand to wipe the tears from my eyes
    The otherís to catch me as I fall from the skies
    One God to guide me as I near my demise
    One mind to plot and devise
    One sign to lead the dumb and the wise

    was just lyrically idk i liked it. Anyways i'm about to write something so this comment is done lol. Keep 'em cumming

    Much love,
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]

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