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    dots Submission Name: dead wrongdots

    Author: young p
    ASL Info:    14/m/N.O.La
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 29/31/11
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       just another collabo from me and troy

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsdead wrongdots

    (young p)
    I was in a graveyard when I made a mistake
    Which means I was dead wrong
    My names not Lance but when it comes to hoes I keep my arm strong
    Im on the top of the mob, call me the don
    Yall the poohest niggas ever, I call you the jon
    Yall niggas tense, Im keeping it calm
    You holding a globe the only way you got the world in your palm
    Yall broke blokes with nothing but jokes and whack quotes
    Pepsi dont have facial hair but you gotta shave coke

    (unknown soldier)
    And Im braving the slopes
    Filling the page with quotes
    Take the despair and let it fade into hope
    Using everyday words and making them dope
    Like lifesavers, holding on for safety to float
    Its a Scarlet Letter, leaving blood stains on the page that I wrote
    These prophecies to make Nostrodamus acknowledge me
    My philosophy is to let the gospel be
    To make my own path and follow me
    How I see the would is affected by my past
    Wasnt worried about collecting the cash
    But moneys the universal language
    So I opened my door the second opportunity rang it
    I cant change it
    Crips and Bloods, banging blue and red
    Not getting lynched but my people are still hanging by a thread

    Submitted on 2006-08-15 00:57:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      geah- this post was on point-

    young p had some good lines- but unknown had the quotable lines-

    dead wrong didnt really fit the content but nice post

    keep it up

    | Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      yea i agree wit SinCeer ya'll were on point wit this and Troy did have the more quotable lines. But young p you did do good wit it and i liked the first two lines. But yea keep posting.

    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]

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