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    dots Submission Name: dead wrongdots
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    Author: young p
    ASL Info:    14/m/N.O.La
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 29/31/11
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 741
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1341



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       just another collabo from me and troy


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    dotsdead wrongdots
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    (young p)
    I was in a graveyard when I made a mistake
    Which means I was dead wrong
    My nameís not Lance but when it comes to hoes I keep my arm strong
    Iím on the top of the mob, call me the don
    Yíall the poohest niggas ever, I call you the jon
    Yíall niggas tense, Iím keeping it calm
    You holding a globe the only way you got the world in your palm
    Yaíll broke blokes with nothing but jokes and whack quotes
    Pepsi donít have facial hair but you gotta shave coke

    (unknown soldier)
    And Iím braving the slopes
    Filling the page with quotes
    Take the despair and let it fade into hope
    Using everyday words and making them dope
    Like lifesavers, holding on for safety to float
    Itís a Scarlet Letter, leaving blood stains on the page that I wrote
    These prophecies to make Nostrodamus acknowledge me
    My philosophy is to let the gospel be
    To make my own path and follow me
    How I see the would is affected by my past
    Wasnít worried about collecting the cash
    But moneyís the universal language
    So I opened my door the second opportunity rang it
    I canít change it
    Crips and Bloods, banging blue and red
    Not getting lynched but my people are still hanging by a thread




    Submitted on 2006-08-15 00:57:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      geah- this post was on point-

    young p had some good lines- but unknown had the quotable lines-

    dead wrong didnt really fit the content but nice post

    keep it up

    PC
    | Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      yea i agree wit SinCeer ya'll were on point wit this and Troy did have the more quotable lines. But young p you did do good wit it and i liked the first two lines. But yea keep posting.


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    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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