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    dots Submission Name: Dead insidedots
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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    26/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.27 - 63/298/259
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsDead insidedots
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    ive lost who i am
    i am alone no-one else here
    broken and scarred
    my emotions are drained
    my life has lost its meaning
    ive lost something important, dead inside
    my mind is numb, reeling from the pain
    in pain all the time
    im dead inside a shell of who i was




    Submitted on 2006-08-15 04:47:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "a shell of who i was"

    Thats awesome. I pictured a sad, little hollow shell.
    You always manage to describe exactly how I feel better than I can.
    I mean, I can break out all kinds of metaphors, but I can't make the emotion scream through. You know?

    Great job
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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