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    dots Submission Name: High way men (Tanka)dots
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    Author: Duke Medhat
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    5.08 - 58/38/24
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 957
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    Bytes: 161



    Description:
       It is a philosophic tanka, I am trying to show that some times we made our enemy and approve them. Instead of fighting them we can just dis-approve them.


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    dotsHigh way men (Tanka)dots
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    High way men approved
    Re-grouped in the hot desert
    Moved to my city

    We do not have to fight them
    We can just dis-approve them




    Submitted on 2006-08-15 08:24:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You pretty ,much wrote your whole poem in your description. Maybe instead of writing parts of your poem in your description, write some of the motivation behind the poem. Like what inspired you to write it. I thought it was short and sweet. Good job. Keep Writing. :)
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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