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    dots Submission Name: Shes So beautifuldots
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    Author: unnatainable
    ASL Info:    20/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 48/42/23
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 759
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 728



    Description:
       i dont really know how this come about.. but i can definately see it as lyrics somewhere..


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    dotsShes So beautifuldots
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    social streets
    and early mornings
    suckers love
    and mothers mourning
    keeping track of wrongs to make it right

    dissapear into the night
    with bloody hands
    and butterflies
    it ties her down and pulls apart her lies

    and she wants to be so beautiful
    she wants to hear she is beautiful

    devils scream
    shes deafly quiet
    all alone she starts a riot
    charging at the voices in her head

    tears of hope
    and silver spoons
    singing softly to the moon
    shes hopes shes flies she cries she dies she lies

    and she wants to be so beautiful
    she wants to know shes beautiful




    Submitted on 2006-08-15 09:14:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You write well. I've read two of your poems so far and I think its some of the best work I've seen on Elite in a while. It comes from the heart, I can tell. And, you write about things personal it seems, not just what is the trend. Its refreshing. You seem wise beyond your years through your words. Keep it up!

    BCute
    | Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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