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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: bloodydreamer27
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 54/130/78
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 700
    Average Vote:    2.0000
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       This is another poem that i wrote about ym ex & still loving him & missing him, & knowing that i'll never have him again b/c he's w/ sum1 else & so am i.

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    I'm brokenhearted and don't know what to do,
    Everytime i think it's always about you.
    When i dream your the only one i see,
    But with me you'll never again be.

    I love you so much but i'm with someone else,
    Being with you is the only way i wont kill myself.
    Cause i'm lost and confused without you here,
    I miss the fun we had like at WingDing with the beer.

    You pissed in a bottle and threw it in the crowd,
    After that everyone was screaming really loud.
    I miss you and with that we could still be friends,
    I'm really sorry i didn't mean to make it end.

    Submitted on 2006-08-15 09:57:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2006-10-07 00:00:00 | by Mr. Creep | [ Reply to This ]
      These verses are a little confusing with no title to guide you. Its almost as if the writer has lost the thread at the end which is a shame because the verses are well written but a little confused. I wait to see some other work by the writer but will end by saying to them that what they have written is a good quality, just needs a rudder to guide the work where it should be going.
    | Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by Colin Douglas | [ Reply to This ]

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