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    dots Submission Name: She Saysdots

    Author: unnatainable
    ASL Info:    20/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 48/42/23
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1029
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 806

       yeah it just is..
    he knows who he is

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    dotsShe Saysdots

    with eyes like bullets
    she penetrates
    her tears are the only thing she fears
    her self control falls with her clothes
    down down
    this spirit will drown
    days like winter
    days like cold
    days not worth waking unless they include him
    he was the last
    its over fast
    blood curdles on the floor
    notes never more
    words written become her blanket
    in this world
    of lonely hearts and rivers
    pianos and guitars
    are playing her heart
    the chords and the strings
    are breaking
    tearing apart
    she screams like noones listening
    and dances like her toes are bleeding
    and loves with her heart undone
    she cant love anyone
    because hes all she can

    Submitted on 2006-08-15 10:50:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poem honestly about broke my heat. I've been in this situation several times. You did a good job of conveying the emotion and tragedy of the situation. I enjoyed reading it and knowing that someone is able to relate.

    As sad as it is that other people have to relate that is. I wish everyong could be nothing but happy. *Smiles*

    | Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it and can relate. It paints a perfect picture for me of recent events
    good job
    | Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by hollow inside | [ Reply to This ]

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