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Author: Aetha Daemon
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Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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I was inspired to write this out after reading Watership Down for the millionth time. I simply love the setting in that book! The maps ruin it for me.


Windy trees
The summer sunshine
To crystal droplets
Dancing on my eyes
Flying to a distant
To rest and fade
To flow into a river
Of passing breezes
The dark
The cold.
Refuge in the white
To collect
in pools of
Shadow, safe and

Submitted on 2006-08-15 11:01:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the simplicity of this poem. I hope the cut dry words that were isolated, were isolated to accentuate their importance. Otherwise I have no problem with this poem, maybe a little more imagery.
| Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]

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