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Old Hen Cluck-a-luck

Author: Aetha Daemon
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Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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This is just a silly little poem I thought up a few seconds ago. Have fun with it, and tell me what you think!

Old Hen Cluck-a-luck

The hen sits on her eggs
And the farmer's son
Walks up.

“Don't come close
you big meanie pig-boy!”
The hen clucks away,
The angry glint in her eyes.

And the big pink boy
Leans closer -sigh-shift-pop-sigh-
“And why should I not,
you cranky old hen?”

The hen cluck-a-lucked
Backed away, and

Yelled the big pink boy thing.
He runs far away quick-quick,
While the old mother cluck hen

“You came close,
you big meanie pig boy,
and got no nose
or mouth to eat my eggs with!”

Submitted on 2006-08-15 15:20:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Haha, that was a funny one. I really liked the style, something a bit different to pique my interests.

| Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by Corbow6 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is why I'm glad I live in the city! No chickens attacking me... Gosh. I kind of feel bad for the poor boy but hey, Mama Hen had to do what Mama Hen had to do. Even though, if a chicken TALKED to me before it attacked me, I would want to get as far away as possible (what are they putting in those hormones they feed them???). Very cute, very funny, definitely something different to get my mind off all the seriousness that is usually on here...

Tay ~~
| Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  Yea no kidding, this was kind of refreshing, not something you normally here. It reminds of my old small town I used to live, where there nothing but animals and farms everwhere. Kind of a breath of fresh air, I love you incoroporated the sounds with words, and made a beat with them. Makes you almost want to do the chicken the dance:)
| Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by Cinder7 | [ Reply to This ]

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