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    dots Submission Name: Alonedots
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    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 744
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 543



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       Really? who doesn't have a poem entitled ALONE?


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    dotsAlonedots
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    Do you really Know the feeling of being alone.
    The feeling for you which is unknown.
    The sensation of want and endless need,
    on your sorrow which it feeds.
    No one there to say goodnight, to tuck you in, turn out the light.
    A soundless cry in which you plead,
    just cut your wrist and let it bleed.
    Your needs and wants, a mystery to others
    No company from sisters and brothers.
    You sit in a corner and stay at home,
    Because in the end your all alone.




    Submitted on 2006-08-15 18:30:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good work hanging on to the rhyming : ) u didn't lose the plot at all in the process.
    keep writing!

    ~tina~
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by tina_mik | [ Reply to This ]
      Again with your captivating writing style! You are very talented! You dominate in the world of poetry as well as you do in the world of karate!
    You gotta write some happy poems to though. I 'm curious as to what those would turn out to be like as well. Well, keep writing as I keep reading! ^_^

    =Ayane=
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      awesome i can feel the sense of being alone i liked it a lot and the ryhming was good cuz it is sometimes hard to keep the ryhme scheme ab ab ab
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by SecludedSoul | [ Reply to This ]


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