Born To Conquer

Author: Katana Ryoko ASL Info:    17/F/Cali Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483 /428 /109 Words: 109

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Born To Conquer

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Born to conquer Born to riches Never known rags He's had the ambition And lust for power Ever since he was young He married a queen And became her king It wasn't long Before he had control Over the empire All in his hold He made plans to seize The nations around him One by one they went down To his military brilliance He was a man of intelligence That no one could challenge His empire grew in wealth and size But he couldn't keep himself From the reality of growing old And he eventually died Without his rule to guide The empire fell into decline

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It's the "lust for power," you added an S. Other than that, I think it's fairly good. It could flow better, but that'll come eventually--it always does. One thing, though--is this really political? If you look at it a certain way, you could actually see it as an allegory for a bad relationship. --crimson echo

| Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]

wow such a wise young lady.........great annalogy and metaphor!......it skips a bit in rythm but over all a great story, well done good lady!.......*turns to young p* ey man its a story enjoy it! dont spycho-annalyze such a thing, its main purpose obviously is something to apply to your own life *hands him a bag of pop-corn* a'ight man now jus lean back in yer lazy boy and watch the magick unfold lol.......all in fun -ropedpoet

| Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by ropedpoet | [ Reply to This ]

yep thats life. this poem does work.nice.

| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]

i was confused by this one. i understood the concept but i can't think of a person in history that u are talking about. is this about Bush? my brother read this and he said that u pretty much described the life of Alexander the Great.

| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by young p | [ Reply to This ]

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