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    dots Submission Name: Born To Conquerdots
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    Author: Katana Ryoko
    ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483/428/109
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 727
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 750



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       I was bored and I'm not sure if this works.


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    dotsBorn To Conquerdots
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    Born to conquer
    Born to riches
    Never known rags
    He's had the ambition
    And lust for power
    Ever since he was young

    He married a queen
    And became her king
    It wasn't long
    Before he had control
    Over the empire
    All in his hold

    He made plans to seize
    The nations around him
    One by one they went down
    To his military brilliance
    He was a man of intelligence
    That no one could challenge

    His empire grew in wealth and size
    But he couldn't keep himself
    From the reality of growing old
    And he eventually died
    Without his rule to guide
    The empire fell into decline




    Submitted on 2006-08-15 23:08:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's the "lust for power," you added an S. Other than that, I think it's fairly good. It could flow better, but that'll come eventually--it always does.
    One thing, though--is this really political? If you look at it a certain way, you could actually see it as an allegory for a bad relationship.
    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      wow such a wise young lady.........great annalogy and metaphor!......it skips a bit in rythm but over all a great story, well done good lady!.......*turns to young p* ey man its a story enjoy it! dont spycho-annalyze such a thing, its main purpose obviously is something to apply to your own life *hands him a bag of pop-corn* a'ight man now jus lean back in yer lazy boy and watch the magick unfold lol.......all in fun
    -ropedpoet
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by ropedpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      yep thats life. this poem does work.nice.
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      i was confused by this one. i understood the concept but i can't think of a person in history that u are talking about. is this about Bush? my brother read this and he said that u pretty much described the life of Alexander the Great.
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by young p | [ Reply to This ]


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