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    dots Submission Name: Four Weeks, and 90 Daysdots
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    Author: Imadjinn
    ASL Info:    17/M/Neverwhere
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 340/348/146
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 621
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1072



    Description:
       just in case you were wondering, a little clarification.

    4 weeks and 90 days is about the ammount of time it takes for colleges to start after the last day of school your senior year.


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    dotsFour Weeks, and 90 Daysdots
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    Four weeks and 90 days.
    That's the deadline, to get it together.

    to find solutions, to hanging resolutions,
    to find an answer to four years.

    Is it letting go?
    heh, no. Not really.
    It's a few people here and there.
    and the impact they've had on me.

    What you must think of me?
    Friend, Lover. Student, Brother.
    a lifebound wannabe fuck.

    I have four weeks, and 90 days.
    I'm going to get it together.
    When I do, I hope you're there.
    to give me the 5 minutes I ask for.

    There are some of you I enjoy now.
    but when this is all over,
    I won't remember you.

    I may think of you,
    and wonder the life you're living.
    if you're happy.
    If you found the answers
    you were looking for.

    But there are some of you,
    that won't ever leave me.

    and I have Four weeks, and 90 days
    to tell you that.




    Submitted on 2006-08-16 01:54:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is very representative of the way many feel before having to go on to an education after high school, it simply just fits.
    One thing that kind of annoyed me, though, was the change you made at the last line from going from spelling the number four to writing it with a number. It just breaks the connection a bit, as it isn't as it used to be. I'm hoping I make sense. If there's an reason for this change, though, I'd love to hear it. :D
    Overall, a very good piece.
    Take Care,
    -Natalia
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Natalia Petro | [ Reply to This ]


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