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    dots Submission Name: Monkeys in Poemsdots
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    Author: Legandor
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 7/9/5
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 768
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       LOL I aint David Attenborough so if any of this is wrong, as I think it's Chimps that attack monkeys, it's all due to poetic license....but anyway, I love the flow of this poem. Whenever I write poetry it's always to a song, and though I adapt it it's usually to "My Bonny lies over the ocean" (dont ask)which is how this one starts, with the limmerick, but it all just turns into rhythmic nonsence the further down you go (about line 3...lol) tis very tuneful though, and the eight lines in the middle is a genuine honest to goodness Middle eight so have a little pause before the next verse.....and you'll be reading it the way I wrote it :D


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    dotsMonkeys in Poemsdots
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    There aren't enough monkeys in poems
    I wish to correct this right now
    I'd love to insert
    Some Simian Verse
    If only I could think of how.

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    They're scratchy and bendy
    And Made up of fleas
    With prehensile tails
    To cling on to trees

    They swing where they need to
    And dont really care
    For audience hygene
    They'll sift through your hair

    They play for attention
    And fight when they must
    With Alphas and Betas
    To gain the groups trust
    Attacking the weaklings
    And chimps for the fun
    Of beating and eating
    Until they're all gone.....

    Though lively and playful
    If you get them angered
    Life will mean naught
    As they're quadruple Handed

    Violently tearing
    And gooped up with gore
    Is nothing to those
    Who poop on the floor

    but

    They're funny and funky
    And all types are cool
    I guess what I'm saying
    Is: all monkeys rule.




    Submitted on 2006-08-16 12:23:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sometimes I wish I was a monkey so I could throw poop at people


    This was very amusing, I liked it. I think it made me want a monkey. I have always wanted a monkey. But first I need to buy a nonsticking poop clothes so that way..I don't get drenched in poop

    ~Kat

    ...Now I have "My Bonnie" stuck in my head....
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      ROFLMAO! My cousin would LOVE this. She's obsessed with monkeys. Oh wow. Thank you so much for this. I love it.

    BCute<3
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh wow! What a great write. I needed a giggle after the day I just had at work. I can relate to this poem, I work with a bunch of monkeys!!
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]


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