Midnight

Author: Strator ASL Info:    22/M/US Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 160 /142 /67 Words: 115

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Midnight

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Entranced in smoke and shadow I lay in wait for time to pass Remembering woes that left me hollow and built inside, a heart of glass. Reminisced on memories so faded they perhaps were no more than dreams Longed for a perception untainted by the things that were less than they seemed. Reflected thoughtfully upon the day and the reasons i had averted my eyes Left behind secrets i needed to say saw beneath your shallow disguise. I traced a star, begot in sorrow bled a tear whose stain would last Died in a flame i'll forget tomorrow as i lay in wait, for time to pass.

Submitted on 2006-08-16 14:47:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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jdfkauheriufniadgf how do you do it? how? i'm jealous. you have a feel, dude. no one has one as strong as yours. <bleedingtears>

| Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

your lines read as though they were ment to be together...your words a perfect...i love this poem it will be on my favorites ...very well done AL

| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]

This was amazing. Contrary to the last comment on one of your poems, I loved the ryhming in this piece! It was just a very excellent poem over all. "Entranced in smoke and shadow I lay in wait for time to pass Remembering woes that left me hollow and built inside, a heart of glass." Those two stanzas just were amazing to me:) This poem reminded me of a Slipknot song on Subliminal Verses: Volume III...I forget the name of the song, but if you know Slipknot, you should know what I'm talking about. If not, it makes this comment pointless:) Nice job, Lia

| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]

this is a poem that will not be forgotten. It just flows together so well. "Remembering woes that left me hollow and built inside, a heart of glass." These two lines really stick out in the poem to me and were just amazing ~LocketzVc

| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by LocketzVC | [ Reply to This ]

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