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Midnight


Author: Strator
ASL Info:    22/M/US
Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 160 /142 /67
Words: 115
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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Midnight



Entranced in smoke and shadow
I lay in wait for time to pass

Remembering woes that left me hollow
and built inside, a heart of glass.

Reminisced on memories so faded
they perhaps were no more than dreams

Longed for a perception untainted
by the things that were less than they seemed.

Reflected thoughtfully upon the day
and the reasons i had averted my eyes

Left behind secrets i needed to say
saw beneath your shallow disguise.

I traced a star, begot in sorrow
bled a tear whose stain would last

Died in a flame i'll forget tomorrow
as i lay in wait, for time to pass.




Submitted on 2006-08-16 14:47:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  jdfkauheriufniadgf
how do you do it?
how?
i'm jealous.
you have a feel, dude.
no one has one as strong as yours.


<bleedingtears>
| Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
  your lines read as though they were ment to be together...your words a perfect...i love this poem it will be on my favorites ...very well done

AL
| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
  This was amazing. Contrary to the last comment on one of your poems, I loved the ryhming in this piece! It was just a very excellent poem over all.

"Entranced in smoke and shadow
I lay in wait for time to pass

Remembering woes that left me hollow
and built inside, a heart of glass."

Those two stanzas just were amazing to me:)

This poem reminded me of a Slipknot song on Subliminal Verses: Volume III...I forget the name of the song, but if you know Slipknot, you should know what I'm talking about. If not, it makes this comment pointless:)

Nice job,
Lia
| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a poem that will not be forgotten. It just flows together so well.

"Remembering woes that left me hollow
and built inside, a heart of glass."

These two lines really stick out in the poem to me and were just amazing
~LocketzVc
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by LocketzVC | [ Reply to This ]


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