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    dots Submission Name: Midnightdots
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    Author: Strator
    ASL Info:    20/M/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 160/140/65
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 257
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    dotsMidnightdots
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    Entranced in smoke and shadow
    I lay in wait for time to pass

    Remembering woes that left me hollow
    and built inside, a heart of glass.

    Reminisced on memories so faded
    they perhaps were no more than dreams

    Longed for a perception untainted
    by the things that were less than they seemed.

    Reflected thoughtfully upon the day
    and the reasons i had averted my eyes

    Left behind secrets i needed to say
    saw beneath your shallow disguise.

    I traced a star, begot in sorrow
    bled a tear whose stain would last

    Died in a flame i'll forget tomorrow
    as i lay in wait, for time to pass.




    Submitted on 2006-08-16 14:47:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      jdfkauheriufniadgf
    how do you do it?
    how?
    i'm jealous.
    you have a feel, dude.
    no one has one as strong as yours.


    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      your lines read as though they were ment to be together...your words a perfect...i love this poem it will be on my favorites ...very well done

    AL
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      This was amazing. Contrary to the last comment on one of your poems, I loved the ryhming in this piece! It was just a very excellent poem over all.

    "Entranced in smoke and shadow
    I lay in wait for time to pass

    Remembering woes that left me hollow
    and built inside, a heart of glass."

    Those two stanzas just were amazing to me:)

    This poem reminded me of a Slipknot song on Subliminal Verses: Volume III...I forget the name of the song, but if you know Slipknot, you should know what I'm talking about. If not, it makes this comment pointless:)

    Nice job,
    Lia
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a poem that will not be forgotten. It just flows together so well.

    "Remembering woes that left me hollow
    and built inside, a heart of glass."

    These two lines really stick out in the poem to me and were just amazing
    ~LocketzVc
    | Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by LocketzVC | [ Reply to This ]



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