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I’ve been through a lot Mistakes parented me and taught me how things are suppose to be Heartbreaks nurtured me Tears became my best friends; each one A different story behind it My past is an advocate for my present Love is a very common word Used loosely in everyone’s vocabulary That’s all it has become just another word No, there has to be one other person that still believes there is more to it The emotion lasts a lifetime The heart aches from its rejection The walls know I have said it more than often Just for the after affect No meaning just barren words Leading to a world of false hopes Filled with wishes and dreams Just to be shun out from the true meaning I forced myself to believe it was true I actually felt love, but For some reason there was something left out Standing at my window one night I looked on into nothing Listening to the silence, I miss her She was the mold to love’s very existence Left now with a battered self conscience Feeling guilty to I administered the same fate Learning was an experience that left me cold A pupil to emotions A diligent watchman to its teachers Reluctant to undergo its harsh backlash Though it can’t keep me from loving again She is sitting right in front of me whilst I write and doesn’t know My true feelings hesitant but will grow I know I will truly love |
Love is a tricky word. Yes, there are so many common uses for it, I love chocolate, my husband loves potato chips but we are so in love with each other it's embarassing. It takes awhile to find the lasting love, the eturnal type of love and one step is finding out that maybe love means just a little bit more. Sounds like you had a pretty hard fall but you made it, and life goes on, changing and rearanging itself daily. And now, maybe this time, you'll be wiser, not pushing yourself so much into your love's face but letting yourself be known, like a scent in the wind. I like coming of age writings, call me nostalgic. I think this writing could use a few word changes just to make it a flow a little easier, small nit-picky things: "how things are suppose to be" maybe could be shorted to "how things should be" it saves on sylables. I remember my 10th grade eng. teacher saying something like...(who can really remember that far back?) say what you mean, use the words you need to use, conserve, you will pay for them someday. And, maybe you should re-read what you post before you hit the submit button. I know it's hard sometimes, but don't be in such a hurry, you have your lifetime to get it done...("Just to be shun out from the true meaning" maybe should be "...shut out..." or perhaps "shunned from true meaning..." Maybe, just a thought.) Stay cool, thanks for sharing...Az| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Azurekat | [ Reply to This ] | |