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Freak


Author: Strator
ASL Info:    22/M/US
Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 160 /142 /67
Words: 130
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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My friend Laura thinks, because she dresses in black that she is a freak...or "goth" Well...I don't agree with that....
So here you go Laura...I dedicate this poem to you.


Freak



In your eyes
no one knows
all the truth you expose

All our masks stick like glue
they hide the facts
that frighten you

Don't speak
your words aren't real

I'm the freak
you're the pill

Swallow it down
don't be scared

I'll never drown
but you never cared

Move my mouth
Incapable
In the crowd
Unspeakable

Don't blend in
try and stick out

Don't give in
stand and be proud

These are things
I've been taught
Always your dreams
I've been caught

Never perfect
try to be

Never worth it
never me

All the screams
Deafening silence
All my dreams
Inside violence

In my head
the voices speak
of things I dread

I'm the freak!




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  Dude, I loved this! It reminds me of one of my poems...Bury It Deep...Anyways, This was excellent:)

This part I liked and didn't like at the same time

"I'm the freak
you're the pill"

It sounds great, but it doens't fit the poem i don't think. It's like this person has never given a [censored], yet their the pill that makes you "normal".

Lia
| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
  Dude, I loved this! It reminds me of one of my poems...Bury It Deep...Anyways, This was excellent:)

This part I liked and didn't like at the same time

"I'm the freak
you're the pill"

It sounds great, but it doens't fit the poem i don't think. It's like this person has never given a [censored], yet their the pill that makes you "normal".

Lia
| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
  Dude, I loved this! It reminds me of one of my poems...Bury It Deep...Anyways, This was excellent:)

This part I liked and didn't like at the same time

"I'm the freak
you're the pill"

It sounds great, but it doens't fit the poem i don't think. It's like this person has never given a [censored], yet their the pill that makes you "normal".

Lia
| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
  Dude, I loved this! It reminds me of one of my poems...Bury It Deep...Anyways, This was excellent:)

This part I liked and didn't like at the same time

"I'm the freak
you're the pill"

It sounds great, but it doens't fit the poem i don't think. It's like this person has never given a [censored], yet their the pill that makes you "normal".

Lia
| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
  this line

"All our masks stick like glue
they hide the facts
that frighten you"

It said that maybe in your eyes, no one is themselves. It seems like they are always constantly not being truthful either with themselves or with others.

Its very well written and a beautiful piece.
~LocketzVc
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by LocketzVC | [ Reply to This ]


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