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    dots Submission Name: Losing a Staring Contest to a Statudots
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    Author: eliwhitneyradio
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 49/51/13
    Words: 276
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 913
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 418



    Description:
       Just a shorty that still took me about an hour.
    EDIT: This poem also looks better before some of the words get forced to the left side of the page. Don't know how to fix it. Sorry.


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    dotsLosing a Staring Contest to a Statudots
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    Swore the eyelids swiveled
    And the sockets crumbled silently
    While your lashes ((( blew away


    from
    me
    )))




    Submitted on 2006-08-16 18:15:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmm, this reminds me of death. BUt i love it! THe wording is nice, searing a wonderful image. Good write!

    (and I agree with MyKemicalfailur)
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]
      oohh. Very short but I really really like it. Seems like it's taken from the middle of something. maybe you could write around it to make something more of it. nice job.
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]


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