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Stolen Kisses


Author: MyKemicalfailur
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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idk. It's just how I feel...


Stolen Kisses



Dreaming of those
Stolen kisses
She can't help but
Hide from this thing
That time can not erase

Thinking of those
Stolen kisses
She can't help but
Shrink inside of
Who she once was

Wishing for those
Stolen kisses
To leave her thoughts
She can't help but
Push everything out

Waiting for those
Stolen kisses
To be fixed
She can't help but
Die inside




Submitted on 2006-08-16 21:59:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like it.

I know exactly what you're thinking here.

I hate that I know this.

But I do.

Wishing for those
Stolen kisses
To leave her thoughts
She can't help but
Push everything out

My grandmother is in ICU, possibly dying, and all I can think of is having just a moment alone with a certain someone that I shouldn't even see, due to the fact that he left me over a year and a half ago for someone else. But he and I are odd, and can't leave each other alone. And I keep hoping for this moment, and a chance to steal one of those self-destructive kisses.

So, I love this. Great job.
| Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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